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Wanted to try my hand at writing. You're probably warned a bit late, but this story has gassy and weight gain stuff in it. Also awful characters.
the fun part was writing all the tooty onomonopoea
also i cant draw. did this instead.

Eku is mine
Agatha is :iconsenpai-potate: 's

why are my comments for this thing at the bottom it really doesn't make any sense. also putting stories on here is kind of confusing sorry
maybe it's too long. i dont know. there are shorter stories. let me know so i can do this sort of thing better.
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:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Impact

Still not sure what the impact slider thing is for, but i am going to assume that it creates cookies. Storywise it is a good piece, the characters are given enough to to flesh out without exposition being forced. Description wise all the descriptions of the characters gives enough feel to show a bit of who they are and what they look like without being forceful. Scenery description was adequate, maybe a bit more to help paint more of a picture, but that's just a personal taste. Also expansions segments gave a good amount of tension, while not losing track of the characters and their feelings. all in all a fun read